Incorporating Your Own Voice Paragraph Example 2 Text Description

The below is a text description of the second paragraph example under the incorporating your own voice section on the essay writing page.

As opposed to the first paragraph, the writer's voice is substantially reduced.

Let’s look at the altered paragraph from the chocolate essay.

Key:

• The internal voice of the writer is bold text and followed by the number (1) in superscript;
• the indirect external voices of other authors (i.e. paraphrases) is bold text, followed by the number (2) in superscript;
• and the direct external voices of other authors (i.e. quotations) is bold text, followed by the number (3) in superscript.

Parker, Parker, & Brotchie, 2006 note⁽¹⁾ that high carbohydrate foods such as chocolate do have a ‘feel good’ effect⁽²⁾. Scholey and Owen (2013) point to several studies, such as⁽¹⁾ Macht and Dettmer (2006) and⁽¹⁾ Macht and Mueller (2007) to confirm this effect⁽²⁾. Parker, Parker and Brotchie (2006, p. 150) note⁽¹⁾ that the mood effects of chocolate⁽²⁾ “are as ephemeral as holding a chocolate in one’s mouth”⁽³⁾. Mood is something that is difficult to isolate and quantify, and aside from the study by⁽¹⁾ Macht and Dettmer (2006) there appears to be little research on any longer term mood affecting influences of chocolate⁽¹⁾. Macht and Dettmer (2006), found that⁽¹⁾ positive responses to chocolate correlated more with anticipation and temporary sensory pleasure, whereas guilt was also a statistically significant factor for many, for whom the ‘feel-good’ effect would be minimalised⁽²⁾. “Temporal tracking of [both] positive and negative emotions”⁽³⁾ before and after consuming chocolate in future studies could help in further understanding the ‘feel good’ effect and more negative emotions (Macht & Dettmer, 2006, p. 335) ⁽²⁾.

Explanation of each voice in the paragraph

The below table breaks the sentence down and contains explanations for each voice used.